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Paradise Girl
My dear woman, whom I met,
when least expected and most needed,
you my dearly beloved woman,
rescued me from my crisis,
which almost destroyed me
and what I had become to be,
you filled the gap in my life
and made it complete.
You brought the thing,
that we refer to as paradise, to me,
my dearly beloved woman.
You made me complete,
with showing me sides of myself,
that were hidden deep inside the mist,
which welled from the gap that you filled,
my dearly beloved paradise girl.
The moment I met you,
I realized the true meaning of happiness,
and all these pleasures you brought to me,
during my drought of luck,
showed me that there is paradise in the world.
You rescued me from my struggle,
my dearest deeply treasured opposite.
For all this what you did to me,
I'll love you forever,
my beloved paradise girl.
My dear woman, whom I met,
when least expected and most needed,
you my dearly beloved woman,
rescued me from my crisis,
which almost destroyed me
and what I had become to be,
you filled the gap in my life
and made it complete.
You brought the thing,
that we refer to as paradise, to me,
my dearly beloved woman.
You made me complete,
with showing me sides of myself,
that were hidden deep inside the mist,
which welled from the gap that you filled,
my dearly beloved paradise girl.
The moment I met you,
I realized the true meaning of happiness,
and all these pleasures you brought to me,
during my drought of luck,
showed me that there is paradise in the world.
You rescued me from my struggle,
my dearest deeply treasured opposite.
For all this what you did to me,
I'll love you forever,
my beloved paradise girl.
This was a gush of poetry which I directed at my by now ex-girlfriend.
Hopefully you guys and gals give me some critique on this piece because it is my first and still only english gush of poetry..
Greetz
Hopefully you guys and gals give me some critique on this piece because it is my first and still only english gush of poetry..
Greetz
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sounds nice, and the form is quite interesting 
it makes it look a bit as if it were written in a rush, as if the emotion of love has come like a wave over you in a moment to make you write and then disappear in the ocean again
it makes it look a bit as if it were written in a rush, as if the emotion of love has come like a wave over you in a moment to make you write and then disappear in the ocean again